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Your story is so powerful. I love it!

Mozzaliam responds:

Thank you!

There's a lot of technical things you need to work out with this animation. Your background doesn't cover your entire stage in some parts and it leaves these glaring white stripes. Also, you do not need the dialogue; this story can be told by action alone. In addition, your choice of font is difficult to read and the yellow text at the end clashes really badly against your background. That being said, it looks like you animated this frame by frame. I applaud you for that because that is not, at all, easy to do. Consider a replay button. If you need help with the code, PM me and I can help you.

XiRoNYeLLoWX7500 responds:

I'm working on it

While I applaud you doing your own voice acting music, I think this short warrants a mature rating based on the dialogue and the language. You also need to show the audience that you're portraying yourself as a girl in order to prevent confusion over why the main character has a male voice.

You should also keep in mind that mature humor, like any humor, is an art and a lot of "it" is in the delivery. I can see potential in your animation, but I really feel like you need to spend a lot more time in planning and execution.

Efilpooc responds:

Yeah I normally plan my toons out with more sensible set-up humor. I just recently started animating with flash again for the first time in two years. I'm just trying to foreshadow my up-coming animations. I have a series with a large cast that I'm trying to get going. Thank you I appreciate you're feedback, deep dude, very deep.

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